Cool for a first try, what i would improve:
-Finding vocals
-Bass is offkey(?) and not distorded enough (phonk has that very distinct distorded bass in the bg most of the time)
-melody is very repetitive and gets boring really quick
-percussions are ok but they're just looping for the entire drop, i would add some variety to spice it up
Overall, it's a good try but it definitely needs some work